Thanks to Hannah Fry’s article in The New Yorker about weather forecasting, I humbly suggest that we all smooth out our use of parentheses.
- “As Blum’s detailed (sometimes overly so) chapters on satellites make clear…”
The break for the parenthetical phrase is choppy, awkward, a bit hard to follow.
What about this: “As Blum’s (sometimes overly) detailed chapters on satellites make clear…”
This keeps all the adverbs and adjectives lined up in a more natural order.
Or maybe you have a better (and possibly overly so) revision in mind?
